black water edits

The once little piece is getting longer. I added a bit after recieving opinion 1. Opinion 2 came in my email this evening. Looks like more detail is going to be added.

Since I've been picturing the piece as a introduction to the world, I've been holding some story details close to the chest. The idea was to reveal some things later in the other tales. However, the piece, which I'll call Black Water from here on out, needs some of those extra details. I can always build upon those details in the following stories and add new ones to the world.